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Annie Goolahey
10-01-2008, 10:14pm
One of the strands of my third book deals with a woman who has been a victim of domestic violence. I'm just digging into her story now and have written the following snippet which is when she starts to replay what has happened to her in her mind.

I thought I would share

He hadn’t hit her before they were married. Her joy on her wedding day was real. Her love for him had been too. It was only afterwards, when they were both exhausted as first time parents, that he let his temper get the better of him. Eimear had been bawling all night and they’d both been exhausted. Being young was no consolation, with a job to go to the next day James wasn’t in the form for an interrupted night’s sleep and Ruth was exhausted from the day in / day out routine of being a new mother to the world’s most demanding infant.
“Sort that baby out,” James had grunted as he’d rolled over to fall back to sleep.
Ruth had felt tears prick her eyes. All she wanted was a full night’s sleep. She had done every night feed to allow her husband a good rest, but should Eimear dare to wake him he was like a bear with a sore head. Of course he’d only be awake until Ruth got up and quietened the baby down, while she was the one walking the floors downstairs, heating bottles and burping their daughter until her eyes were so heavy with sleep she became terrified she would fall asleep and smother her baby.
That night her spirit could take no more.
“Honey, can you do it? I’m so tired,” she’d said, her voice breaking.
She felt his body stiffen, his breathing growing deeper, but there was no response and Eimear was still crying.
“Please honey,” she pleaded, reaching out her hand to him and stroking his back gently.
He turned around and in what seemed like one swift movement he grabbed her wrist – hard – and pushed her back on the bed. His face close to hers, but all hint of intimacy missing, he told her that Eimear was her responsibility and if she didn’t sort the baby out right there and then she could spend the night, along with her child, in the garden. He had pushed her then, so that she fell out of the bed and crashed to the floor and as she fed her daughter shortly afterwards, feeling the bruising on her wrist and her legs she wondered what had just happened.
They were on edge, of course they were. Their happy existence of just Ruth and James had gone out the window and they were bound to get snappy, weren’t they?
He hadn’t meant it, he hadn’t mean for her to fall from the bed and when she climbed in beside him later he reached over and wrapped his arm around her.
“Sorry,” he muttered and fell back to sleep while she lay in the dark and promised to try harder to be a good wife.
The next time was a few weeks later. Eimear hadn’t been crying that time, but Ruth had been exhausted again from a day dealing with her. When James came in from work she offloaded her complaints to him until he had asked her to give his head peace. She had sat down, her pride hurt and her temper flaring. She tried to bite back her frustration but day dealing with a colicky baby had her at the end of her tether.
“So sorry to interrupting your busy day with worries about my sad little life here looking after our baby – who has been crying all afternoon. I’m sorry that I thought you might be interested or supportive or give a damn about what I’m going through.
“I asked you to give my head peace,” James said, his fists clenching.
“And I asked you to listen and to give a shit about us,” Ruth shouted, her temper finally breaking. But as her words reached a crescendo, she was silenced by a blow to the side of the face. It was so strong it knocked her against the wall. It was so strong it took the breath from her body and it was a good ten seconds before it came back. Gasping, unable to believe what had just happened, she stood up. Her cheek throbbed, and there was a ringing in her ears. All of this however was eclipsed by the thumping of her heart and the sobbing of her husband.
“Oh God Ruth, I’m sorry. I’m so sorry.”
She walked across the room to where he was sat and crouched down beside him. Wrapping her arms around him she soothed his tears as he promised never, ever to do it again.
He lied.

Pancake01
10-01-2008, 10:19pm
:shock:

fifitrix
10-01-2008, 10:20pm
:cry: :cry:

Skerry Berry
10-01-2008, 10:20pm
OMG AG, that is so powerful.

Miss Frosty
10-01-2008, 10:20pm
:cry: but so typical of lives lead by so many women unfortunately.

Hanie
10-01-2008, 10:22pm
Dear god I can't believe I have to wait to find out what happens I want to know now. :hissyfit: :hissyfit:

Adelelee
10-01-2008, 10:23pm
:cry::cry: very powerful AG

xx

Amanda36
10-01-2008, 10:23pm
I want to read more NOW!!!!

can't wait to read the book

Peridot
10-01-2008, 10:24pm
wow that's brilliant Annie - I want to read more!!
Truely heart-breaking though :no:

PruBear
10-01-2008, 10:25pm
:cry:

OMG i want to smack his face to the wall now too.

Thats a very powerful vivid piece of writing. Scary, life like. Im alittle stunned atm its brilliant writing.

Annie Goolahey
10-01-2008, 10:26pm
:oops: Thanks girls.

Angel
10-01-2008, 10:50pm
OMG !

That is beautifully written. I so want to read the rest of the book now.

Puffy
10-01-2008, 10:53pm
is that going to be your "trailer " for the book?? Its fan fecking tabulous and I want to read it NOW!!
you are a tease!! utterly breathtaking and very very more-ish (as in i want to read more)
Wonderful

Annie Goolahey
11-01-2008, 10:09am
It's not the trailer for the book - not got that far yet. It's about half way through. There are four storylines running throughout and this is one of them.
I'm really conscious of doing it right. I've spoken to a lot of people who have been in abusive relationships so I hoped what I'm doing rings true.

Teresa
11-01-2008, 10:22am
That is wonderful and so powerful. It almost made me cry though.

*Fallen Angel*
11-01-2008, 10:40am
OMG !

That is beautifully written. I so want to read the rest of the book now.

So do I. Fantastic piece of writing Annie.

Rosebud
11-01-2008, 10:46am
That is brilliant Annie, I really have to read the rest now. It is going to drive me mad waiting :grin:

Mad Madam Mim
11-01-2008, 11:43am
It's really very good Annie. :nod:

Squeaker
15-01-2008, 01:44pm
I've never been abused AG but I know women who have and I think you've captured the slow start of abuse very well. Sadly, it was very realistic and believable ifyswim? Makes me extremely grateful for my DH.

jubiedoo16
15-01-2008, 01:52pm
Wow very powerful and emotional. Im sure we can all remember times feeling on the edge of desperation with tiredness, thankfully though ive not had to deal with something like that on top of it. I love it and am gripped already.

Redsquare
15-01-2008, 01:59pm
Brilliant piece of writing.

I want to read more.

popinjay1
15-01-2008, 02:04pm
Very powerful indeed. Brilliantly written.

DKNI
15-01-2008, 02:11pm
My ex only ever got violent toward the end but the whole lack of sleep and the man not being interested rang true.
The feeling of pride being bruised as well as eventually the body was very poignant indeed.

I can't wait for both of your new books.

5andra
15-01-2008, 02:25pm
Number one was great,cant wait for number two,and now you big tease you do this to us roll on number three.:ellie: A best seller in the pipeline fantastic writing.:clap:

Devil Girl
27-01-2008, 02:37pm
Wow that is brilliant :bow:

Well done :flowers:

Tinkle
27-01-2008, 02:45pm
OMG, I need more, I need to know how her life went. You have a fantastic way of writing. So much so I didnt want to stop reading. Like when I read your book it was stuck to me like I had glued it to my hand. Wonderful read!